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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-01-14
Ancestors by `salshep ( Featured by wreckling )
:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2012  Professional Writer
Hello! Your piece has been featured here. Kindly :+fav: the article, if you wish, to bring attention to the artwork and the contest. Thanks! :)
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Stefymoondust Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
very vivid....so beautiful ''Tangled in these oldest nets, I breathe
my first deep ocean breath.'' i like this part
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Thanks very much. I like that part, too.
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Alex0Jericho Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012   General Artist
excellent.
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:iconsalshep:
salshep Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Thank you.
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AmericanoHooker Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Holy whoa. O_O Fucking amazing. :heart:
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:iconsalshep:
salshep Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Cheers, glad you liked it.
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
*Huzzah!*

This is truly breathtaking. A well-deserved DD.
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:iconsalshep:
salshep Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Thanks so much. :)
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scatteredwords Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
(I featured this wonderful work in a journal: [link])
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:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Professional Writer
....Wow. This is amazing.
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:iconsalshep:
salshep Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Glad you enjoyed it!
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Professional Writer
:)
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Coriacea Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Ah, you've ensared my biologist's heart. Wonderful!
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:iconsalshep:
salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
*holds up the specimen jar containing said heart*

Yay! And thanks!
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Coriacea Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You are most welcome!
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Sunjinjo Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice. I love the feel of evolution and embryology. Congrats on the DD! :D
Just one thing though; it should be Coelacanth, not Coelecanth. ^^
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Oh fudge. You know, I even corrected it? Like, made the correct spelling incorrect, in a fit of being unsure I was indeed correct. Go me.

Thanks for that, and for reading. :)
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Sunjinjo Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Heheh ^^ Happens to the best of us!
It´s a great read. :D
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silvicultrix Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Student Writer
Unhf. Teach me how to do sound like you, pleaseandthankyou. I read this three times in a row and still am in the throes of a love affair with "Sargassum hunts / for siblings in murk and mermaid grass."

Also, this is a strange thing to like about a poem, I suppose, but I really like that you've done it in couplets. Maybe because the structure is juxtaposed against the slightly squidgy imagery in a way that appeals to me. Maybe because there is not enough deviant love for structure, in general.

Anyways, this is lovely and tightly crafted and perfect. Congratulations on the Daily Deviation-- it's well-deserved.
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Hey cheers for the kind words.

As for sonics, here's a couple links to articles by the amazing Rachel Lindley which you might useful:

- article 1

- article 2

That's pretty much where I learned about sound (and am still learning).
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silvicultrix Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Student Writer
Haha, I was mainly kidding about the sonics, but these are great articles. Thanks for sharing!
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Nichrysalis Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow... Simply marvelous.
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Cheers, thanks for reading.
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KittyKun1999 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing!
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♑+♑=Me and Gamzee~

♑ I am a Capricorn,which means i'm Gamzee, which means I go CrAzYyYyY~!
Homestuck addict
Aww~! look at the little froggy in my icon! Isn't he so-*whipped by tongue*
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Thanks!
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KittyKun1999 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No prob!

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♑+♑=Me and Gamzee~

♑ I am a Capricorn,which means i'm Gamzee, which means I go CrAzYyYyY~!
Homestuck addict
Aww~! look at the little froggy in my icon! Isn't he so-*whipped by tongue*
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AlexaeriveNight Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Student Writer
It's beautiful
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:iconsalshep:
salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Thank you!
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ArchaicTears Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
I really enjoyed the pace of this piece I could even picture myself in the deep blue for a minute there. :D Thank you!
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Mission accomplished, then! Thanks very much for reading, glad you enjoyed it.
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Lepidopteral Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
I'm not much of a poetry buff, so I'm sorry I can't say much more than I love it :D
The imagery is gorgeous, and I think it works really well with the poem's structure (in my shamefully ignorant opinion!)
Congrats on the DD, too!
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Loving it is perfectly fine, lol. Thanks for the comment on the structure. I had hoped it worked to give the poem some 'air', so to speak.

Glad you liked it, and thanks for reading.
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Syarette Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Great choice of words, impressive :heart: Congrats~
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Thanks very much!
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Cosmic--Chaos Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh, you remember the "bloop" phenomenon as well, eh? :lol:
But I love this poem and how you describe the prehistoric creatures and organisms floatiing around ^^
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Cosmic--Chaos Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*floating, sorry.
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
blooping reveals my age? /failbloop

Cheers, glad you enjoyed it.
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bloodsuckingmonster3 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
So awesome! :D
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Thanks! :)
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bloodsuckingmonster3 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
;) Welcome
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Vigilo Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Student Writer
This is gorgeous. Congratulations on your DD - well deserved! The sound of this is beautiful; I had to read aloud just to savour it. :heart:
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Hey, I'm glad you read it aloud. Sound's pretty important to me, it makes me happy when others enjoy it. Thanks for reading!
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. :)
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Oh wow, cool. Thanks, lil bird!
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angelStained Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2012   Writer
rhythmic brilliance.
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Thank you!
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somnomollior Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012   Writer
I pleasing blend of visuals and sounds. The pervading wateriness makes me feel happily squelchy. Full of meloncholy and darkness but beautiful at the same time. I especially like the words: tangled in these oldest nets.
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salshep Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Thanks as ever for reading - and I'm glad you got the squelchy feel from it. xD
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012
I love the words you use, especially in the last two couplets.
This is very lovely. :heart:
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